super smash bros:echoes of the past

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Post by returnofmastercrazyhand on 30th October 2014, 2:33 pm

Okay, so I decided to show off just how cliched and troped my fanfiction can be by starting with a modified version of one of my favorites.(so as to include more limelight for minor characters and to appeal to the real life variant while explaining anything I would have described in a previous fanfiction or such)
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prologue:

prologue:
Austin, the demigod of Subspace returns

A LONG time ago, there were two friends, both gods of a place called Subspace. Dasi, the man, and Tabuu, the angel. When the two had a fight, Tabuu killed Dasi and began to take over the surrounding dimensions, but that story is closed thanks to the heroes and villains of the Land of Trophies teaming up. Before that happened though, Dasi sent his newborn son into the dimension that we know  the most about because we humans are living in it(Dimension S4 is the official name by the way). That son was named Austin and grew up to be a normal human until the last adventure, where he discovered his origins and how he is the true heir to Subspace after godfather's defeat. He also discovered his extra-dimensional powers, and how he can bend Subspace and similar dimensions to his will, but to a limited extent. He and the latest group of smashers eventually saved the World of Trophies from TRUE evil once more.  
Recently however, Austin received a mysterious message from the smashers known as Mr Game & Watch and R.O.B. that an evil from the past is threatening the World of Trophies once more. Fearing it could be his godfather, Tabuu, he immediately returned to his home in Subspace, greeting old friends like Red from the Pokemon universe and Captain Falcon of F-zero fame while welcoming new faces like Professor Layton from a self-titled universe and a couple new Mii fighter types. However, What he didn't realize is that the "distress call" was a trap and therefore was set up by a new evil who is going to draw on the memories and powers of Austin to make the memories of the smashers worst threats alive again...


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Post by Lief Katano on 30th October 2014, 2:48 pm

One thing nagging me (besides, er, the usual): in narration, you shouldn't use acronyms like FYI. "By the way" would be a better option.


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Post by returnofmastercrazyhand on 30th October 2014, 2:51 pm

fixed.


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Post by Lief Katano on 30th October 2014, 2:54 pm

Alright, thanks. I know my nagging about grammar can be annoying, and I try to tone it down, but being a story, I just thought exercising good English would be more important.


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Post by returnofmastercrazyhand on 30th October 2014, 2:58 pm

which I realized and tried to actually use capitals.


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Post by Truthseeker4449 on 30th October 2014, 3:03 pm

Then are you going to go back and capitalize that first sentence?


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