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Post by returnofmastercrazyhand 30th October 2014, 2:33 pm

Okay, so I decided to show off just how cliched and troped my fanfiction can be by starting with a modified version of one of my favorites.(so as to include more limelight for minor characters and to appeal to the real life variant while explaining anything I would have described in a previous fanfiction or such)
Anyway...

prologue:


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Post by Lief Katano 30th October 2014, 2:48 pm

One thing nagging me (besides, er, the usual): in narration, you shouldn't use acronyms like FYI. "By the way" would be a better option.
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Post by returnofmastercrazyhand 30th October 2014, 2:51 pm

fixed.
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Post by Lief Katano 30th October 2014, 2:54 pm

Alright, thanks. I know my nagging about grammar can be annoying, and I try to tone it down, but being a story, I just thought exercising good English would be more important.
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Post by returnofmastercrazyhand 30th October 2014, 2:58 pm

which I realized and tried to actually use capitals.
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Post by Truthseeker4449 30th October 2014, 3:03 pm

Then are you going to go back and capitalize that first sentence?
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